One moon light night a small man strolled on the deserted beach. Hovering overhead a full moon.”I wonder if werewolves are real” HE said to himself “agggggh” screamed the man.Daily News,Man had fright of his life when he came inches away from death.”I didn’t know what hit me it seemed like half man half wolf, teeth as sharp as razor blades, as long as bananas”. “There you have it folks this is Daily News signing out. Throughout the next 2 weeks dozens of people had the same thing happen,under the full moon on that beach beneath the old dead birch tree.
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Good job Thomas on your story!
It was very detailed and entertaining to read.
One thing I wish for you would be to check all the spelling and punctuation before posting the story!
Other than that I think you did a great job!!!
What an entertaining story! I loved the change of tone throughout, when it went from the man’s thinking to the newspaper headline, back to more things happening to different people. At the end, when it said the same thing happened to more people, I wondered whether this meant more people turned into werewolves, or whether more people had questions in their minds that they were suddenly able to investigate…?
My wish for you is that you take the time to re-read your story aloud to yourself, once it is finished. That way you are more likely to pick up small errors (missing word here and there) and take away from the overall elegance of the story.
Keep up the great work!
Congratulations on your response to this week’s prompt Thomas. Your first sentence set the scene clearly in my mind, with the full moon hovering. Changing from the man’s thinking to a newspaper report to the importance of the events was a clever author’s device. I liked the use of similes to describe the werewolf. Asking a friend to help you edit for spelling and punctuation will help you to improve your writing even more.
Hi Thomas,
Thank you for sharing your wonderful writing this week. I loved your fantastic use of similes to describe the teeth and could really picture things in my mind.
Keep up the great work
Mrs MooreTeam 100London